comments for improvement- NEA first draft

 MUSIC VIDEO COMMENTS

- more lip syncing needed add more lip synching shots 

- some shots are too long (specifically the ocean scene) shorten some shots and replace them

- video needs more movement eg- shots from a car add shots of a car 

- videos of someone playing a guitar could be added film and add guitar playing close up shots 

- add warner bros logo and website link at end of video

- cut up clip of map to give a more succinct storyline add more animation

- music video loses pace at the end- random shots which could be cut 

- too abrupt ending add more clips which allow the song to 'fade' out 

WEBSITE COMMENTS

- tidy up merch page add map as a purchasable poster

- add warner bros logo 

website- first draft

 

music video first draft

music video

intertextuality within my music video and website.

 MY PRODUCT 

MY INSPIRATION

I was inspired by 

MUSIC VIDEO INTERTEXTUALITY

this clip from my music video pays homage to the original song by simon and garfunkel 

the songs surrounding it on the jukebox are all songs from around the 60s period to continue my vintage 1970s style 

the songs i chose also are ones which i thought the target audience, who like the music of my band, might also enjoy 

i chose to begin my music video with someone turning the song on and then the music begins playing. i began the video with diegetic and then faded in the non-diegetic song. this is an inter textual reference to iconic media moments such as: Pulp Fiction, Almost Famous, and The Royal Tenenbaums. These films are all ones which my target audience would enjoy, therefore allowing them to understand the references made to them in my music video. 

- small intertextual reference to Grease and The Notebook; both films which contain a scene of a couple on a ferris wheel

- furthermore, more intertextual references are made to the film Grease later on in the music video, in the diner where the couple hide behind the diner's menus 

- intertextual reference to Subterranean Blues music video by Bob Dylan 

NEA UPDATE 14/10/25

Recently I have been creating fake merchandise for my band's website. I began by researching some actual merch pages on band websites for inspiration. I have, since then, crested an album cover swell as a car bumper sticker. 

NEA UPDATE 13/10/25

9.10.25

Recently for my NEA, I have been editing my website by adding elements to my tour page such as links leading to a page where you can ´purchase´ tour tickets from a series of dates. 

11.10.25

I am currently editing my website further by looking for images to add to the ABOUT US page for the band. 

12.10.25

I am currently further editing my website by creating album covers for CDs and vinyls for the merchandise. 

class feedback on initial NEA plan

 

NEA UPDATE 7/10/25

In my most previous lessons, I have been working on editing my music video and sharpening it up. I have edited the scale of some of my clips such as the lip-synching ones. I zoomed in on the actors' face's in order to be able to see their mouths more clearly, allowing the lyrics to be followed more easily. Furthermore, I extended some of my clips and cut others down to match the beats of the music. 

I have also removed some of the unnecessary clips from my video to refine the video further.